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trusted love PIM 6-10-05
Feelings
that can show through
Tenderly comfort, youthful
memories.
My tears trusted desire
Treasured your precious love
This was a very beautiful poem even though this is the second poem I think it is the best poem so
far that I have read.Good work!
Reviewed by babycj_92
no, a poem never needs to rhyme. This is gorgeous in and of itself... Romantic without being cheesy
filled with nostalgia and heartache. Your heart is on your sleeve. Beautiful! Amanda
Reviewed by waxingwane
no rhyme needed here in this terrific pim. how poets write such good poems with limited words never
ceases to amaze me! you amaze me with this one!
Reviewed by seay49 thought this precious to view. It must be a heartfelt write for you. Grande write of the pencil....and
for a PIM...(I am not too great with those..lol) you have written this very well....Smiles to you.
Moe~
Reviewed by Maureen Sc hlag
you chose very deep and expressive words in this short but very deep poem. I like it because I like
the fact that I can go deep inside it. Good job
Reviewed by mariapdSo very lovely and so sweet....a love portrayed in so little words and truly heartfelt....soft
and gentle too...I enjoyed this write and well penned...thank you for sharing
Reviewed by musicalboxedancer
very focused PIM. Not always easy to fit words together in this conest, is it? You have done
a nice jo here
Reviewed by patricia tolleyGRasping Daylight 6-16-05
use your imagination on htis.U'd be surpirsed what u think
grasping production fruits surrenders
everywhere blossoms concealed silky ground
Creating
invisible foliage substained daylight I like the picturesque scene you were
able to creat with your use of visual imagery; very good job with the PIM format. Thanks for sharing
Reviewed by naphtalii love the imagery of your poem. as always it is powerful and succulent. your imagery is quite sensual.
i like the invisible foliage.
Reviewed by BMSULLYCAT
Invisible Light PIM 6-16-05
you
do the imagery :)
invisible ground shelters
darkness
everywhere life creating daylight
substaining grids surrenders desire
open skywards bursting light
Very imaginative PIM. Yes, you show such
imagery is
this PIM. It's well meaning and
so open very it's in invisible round shelters. Out of the darkness comes the light. hugs
jmm
Reviewed by jmmstone
wow girl, you did it again! you're an addict! lol. you did the imagery for me thank you and painted
a portrait of light and liberty. Great job! Amanda
Reviewed by waxingwane
VERY WELL DONE IMAGERY AND VERSE STRUCTURE IS GOOD THE
READER IS ABLE TO MAKE HIS OWN CONCLUSIONS FROM THIS WORK GOOD JOB
Reviewed by BROCHEE
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Thinking Bites PIM 6-15-05
use your own imagination:)
thinking
barely dusted my finger
yeast still rising
kitchen smell pies
found heavy mosquito bites
This is a profound metaphor for arising thoughts or so
I think. Oh, hello again! And it led you to yet another wonderful poem. Great job for a change! lol, Amanda
Very nice PIM. It amazes me that the poets can look at the same words, and write completely different PIM's. Good job
Reviewed by mpearce
Definitely something cooking in that kitchen! Nice metaphors
for a very good time that was possibly had. (I think I got it)
Reviewed by dbdraper
I think this poem was very symbolistic about life in general.
You go through the motions, without a though. The yeast rises to create a thought making you aware again, noticing your mosquito
bites all of a sudden.
Very nice use of so few words, not one wasted. GREAT :) friend
Reviewed by gaffney
Detained first-hand
PIM 6-14-05
poetry in motion- use your own imagery
Detained scarred shame-games
include hills bound snow rides
blued
without sleep iron-fisted love battered
Stranger-forces drowned first -hand
A very well written
poem, with few words, and much emotion. A very profound message I read into this one. Excellent expression of despair
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Reviewed by waxingwane
Raging Love......(PIM)
Fire and water
Searing this raging
love storm
Fear is a broken heart
Swallowed by the empty inferno
Of desire
Society Of Starvation PIM 8-9-05
The
imagery is profound if you think about it
Giant
crayons, Man-made boxes
Society of starvation
laying in the streets,crammed
Naked gutters fall out of control
~michelle
L.Wagner@}~~~
Fallen society PIM 8-10-05
imagery here should be clear
fallen
battered leaves
depressed thoguths
cold fateful scream
society can't hear them
Different from the rest
Different from the rest
She thinks this was a test
Breaking
the unbroken seal
Man this wasn''t the deal
Loving those around
It is a majical sound
Stepped back in time
and
re-opened her mind
When thought all was a loss
She found there was just cause
Emotion and love
Comes straight
from above
A time bomb ready to burst
Almost like it was rehearesed
Just because
I wait between
soft sky
and tattered waves,
Sleeping amongst ancient rituals
of restless waters and love.
8-4-05
If
babies laugh
over soft small thoughts,
Men, surrounded by love,
are laughing over
deep, hot desires,
each sharing.
8-4-05
Poetry.com
Silky cord against my throat.
Nibbling. Pulsing,
Hot,
Cold.
Voices glutted with desire.
Demanding.
Love
so bold kindled the moon.
8-5-05
Rumors abound.
As misguided starlight
dispels imagination,
infinitesimal
worlds
adorned with promise
allowed relentless wayfarers
one grand journey.
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